Should I keep writing? Am I even any good?? (very short writing sample included)?

Some parts are painfully cliche.... ("Sweet nothings?" "Unwritten music?" "Nothing yet everything?" "The 'real' world?") .....BUT the way you string words together is, like, poetry in motion or something. Seriously, I love it. It's like you reinvented the wheel... into something that makes my heart sing and break at the same time... ='(